Edward McDermott continued: On[e] (sic) sentance stricture.
One thing. I think we should shorten this sentance.
"Didn’t they have prison tattoos on their arms?"
Dropping all the reference to ball point pen.
Otherwise, I don't seen any revisions that are required.
[Editor's note: Let it be known that writers are not editors nor writers editors nor ever the twain shall never say never. Nor let it not be said that I might like you better if we slept together. Irridescent of that, TQRstories is pleased to have Mr. McDermott's brilliant venture GOING HOME for it's winter issue.]